IXL | Suggest appropriate revisions | 8th grade language arts

Read the following text from a student essay. How can the writer best improve his or her word choice?

If I could invent something, I would create a really nice bicycle. My bike would have a good seat and great tires so that I could ride it anywhere. It would also have a bell and special pockets for carrying things. A special top would be wonderful, so I could ride it in the rain but also enjoy the sun. I would choose a fun color to reflect my personality. Inventing a new bike would be cool.

by using more specific language

by reducing repetitive language

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Read the following text from a student essay. How can the writer best improve his or her word choice?

by using more specific language

by reducing repetitive language

key idea

When you review a fellow student's writing, try to make your feedback clear and specific. You can use questions such as the following to guide your feedback:

Ideas and development: Does the writer express a clear main idea and develop it with evidence, examples, and analysis?

Organization: Does the writer order ideas in a clear, logical way so that the ideas build on one another and are easy to follow?

Sentence fluency: Do the writer's sentences vary in structure and length, or does the writing sound choppy, rambling, or repetitive?

Word choice: Does the writer use words accurately and precisely, avoiding excessive repetition or inappropriate language to create clear, effective, and engaging writing?

Grammar and mechanics: Does the writer use accurate spelling, punctuation, and grammar to create writing that is correct and easy to read?

solution

The writer could best improve his or her word choice by using more specific language.

For example, the writer could replace the underlined text with more descriptive language, such as the perfect bicycle; comfortable; durable; my cell phone, a water bottle, and a snack; foldable, umbrella-like top; an unusual color like turquoise or magenta; my own custom bicycle; and thrilling.

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C.2Which sentence is more formal?

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