IXL | Suggest appropriate revisions | 11th grade language arts

Read the following excerpt from a student essay. How can the writer best improve his or her organization?

For several reasons, plagiarism is a major issue in schools today. Part of the problem is that many students don't even know what plagiarism means exactly. For teachers, it can be a challenge to spot plagiarism. As a result, several Internet services have been created to help teachers detect copied material by showing the sources of passages that aren't original. Students need to know that any act of using another person's ideas or words without giving credit to that person is plagiarism. They must understand how serious the consequences can be. People who plagiarize may have their reputation and credibility destroyed, and they may be in violation of copyright laws. It is important for students and teachers to work together to prevent plagiarism.

by discussing one topic before moving on to another

by removing text unrelated to the main idea

by making a general statement before giving examples

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Read the following excerpt from a student essay. How can the writer best improve his or her word choice?

Automobile companies should be required to manufacture more fuel-efficient vehicles. This shift would help the environment by lowering the demand for crude oil and lowering the level of pollutants released into the atmosphere. If fuel-efficient cars were manufactured, the economy would improve, too. As people lowered their expenses for gas, they would be able to increase spending on other products. Also, manufacturing these cars would drive technology forward: other new products would likely be manufactured, too.

by reducing repetitive language

by including more figurative language

by fixing misused words

key idea

During peer review, you read and respond to a fellow student's writing. While there are many methods and strategies that you can use for reviewing a text, it is generally helpful to frame your suggestions in concrete and constructive ways and to consider the following areas for revision:

Ideas and development: Does the writer express a clear idea and develop it with evidence, examples, or analysis?

Organization: Does the writer order ideas in a clear, logical way so that they build on one another and are easy to follow?

Voice: Does the writer maintain an appropriate voice, such as a formal and objective voice in an academic essay or an engaging and expressive voice in a narrative essay?

Sentence fluency: Does the writer use sentences that vary in structure and length to create a sense of rhythm and flow within and between sentences, or does the writing sound choppy, rambling, or repetitive?

Word choice: Does the writer use words accurately and precisely to create clear, effective, and engaging writing?

Grammar and mechanics: Does the writer follow appropriate conventions, using accurate spelling, punctuation, and grammar to create writing that is correct and easy to read?

solution

The writer could best improve his or her word choice by reducing repetitive language.

For example, the writer could revise the underlined text by using synonyms of manufacture, such as make, produce, create, and build, and synonyms of lower, such as decrease or reduce.

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Not feeling ready yet? These can help:

B.2Compare passages for subjective and objective tone

K.3Choose the best evidence to support a claim

I.2Organize information by topic

X.3Choose punctuation to avoid fragments and run-ons

P.7Suggest appropriate revisions

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